Alright, so here's another poem I JUST finished. I fixed it up a little bit before putting it up here, but still if anyone thinks it could be better let me know, and let me know what you think of it. Originally, each stanza had 6 lines in it (with 3 stanzas, that's an interesting 666, hmmm), but the last two lines were a little bit out of place in the stanza, so I separated them. Here it is:

Motivation is so hard to find,
in a world so full of empty promises.
The TV tells me it'll make me happy,
the movies claim to complete me.

But I look and only discover,
disappointment and regret.

They tell me to look forward
to the bright future ahead.
But the path I must walk along
is laden with sorrow and hatred.

Bad memories and bad vibes
rush over me in anxious ecstacy.

To search for what I once lost,
leaves me yearning and forlorn.
But waiting for equilibrium
keeps me anxious and troubled.

In a world so empty,
why can't I find myself?

Cool. I like it. The breaking up of the stanzas suits it better than if you'd put all 6 lines together. A few minor corrections: TV doesn't need periods and should be capitalised because it's an initialism (you pronounce each letter). The only other thing was that disappointment was spelt wrong.

The one line I found slightly confusing was:

rush over me in anxious ecstacy.

I don't quite grasp what you mean here by anxious ecstacy. Maybe you could explain it to me.

It's alright, if not a little basic. It doesn't throw up much imagery. Maybe use some more unique words? Perhaps a different rhyming pattern? Of course these are my poetic biases, but I think a little obscurity would lend itself well.

It's alright, if not a little basic. It doesn't throw up much imagery. Maybe use some more unique words? Perhaps a different rhyming pattern? Of course these are my poetic biases, but I think a little obscurity would lend itself well.

Yea, "painting a picture" in the reader's mind is one of the things I need to work on. Also like you said, I need to expand the vocabulary I use in my poems, but thank you for the comments.

And to Malkog, this line:
Bad memories and bad vibes
rush over me in anxious ecstacy.

What I meant by it is that the negative things in my past are just waiting to come over me again. Anxious as in they just can't wait another minute to sneak up on me and bring me down. And then I used ecstacy because I'm trying to say that it feels almost like "the bad memories and bad vibes" get a great deal of pleasure from bringing me down with them. Hopefully that was a good enough explanation, haha. It might've been a better idea to use a different word than ecstacy, though, but thanks again.

EDIT: Oh yea, I thought this
The only other thing was that disappointment was spelt wrong.
was really funny just because of what the word was.