well i think all emo poems are bad, but i like to write them sometimes here is one i wrote the other day

unfortunately your kisses will not help me with the well of sadness erupting from my soul

why doesn’t the ringing madness slow with its ever gluttonous immensity

intense as the pain felt whist a new born love is thrown into the chasm of dark light

blind am I to the androgynous god of despair who's many tentacles line my being

as if tied to a distant fading star, my faint grip on the beast is beginning to wan

all hope is lost in a sea of tears, nothing left but mangos ripened in the sun

If you hadn't labelled it as emo, I probably wouldn't have called it that.

Your lines are too long. Your first line is 24 syllables. I'd try to keep it under 15. I mean, I'm not going to tell you how to write your poem, but I think it would be easier to read if you shortened the lines. Just from looking at your first line, I think it would work better if it was split in half so that it was:

unfortunately your kisses will not help me
with the well of sadness erupting from my soul

Punctuation will really help as well. You might not think so but it really makes a big difference to readability. I'd also try to avoid or at least minimise the use of words with more than 4 syllables. A word like 'unfortunately' has 5 and that might be an entire line of another poem. Still, that's not to say don't ever use them, they can contribute to the style of your poem just as easily as they can subtract from its meaning.

There's one comma in your entire post. Punctuation would be the first thing I'd take a look at.