'twas her eyes, I knew them in my sleep
her lies my soul will ever keep
close to hand, in minds eye
forever safe until I die.
watch her smile, it looks so real
Then the facade begins to peel
faded paint on rotted wood
would I go back if I could?
It's her laugh, that song of soul
so alive yet flat, It's icy cold
The air itself shatters from this
as if an icicle met demons kiss

I like it much, though the transition from the first half to the second isn't as smooth as masturbation

Yeah, the two halves could have an easier transition. I also thought that the last two lines sounded rather awkward, perhaps those lines could be reworked.

Otherwise, I think it's good. I like the line "faded paint on rotted wood", it's a nice image that compliments the second half of the poem, contrasts well with the first half.

I totally respect your feedback guys.
Um thing is I've never taken writing courses as i have dyslexia and It already makes reading a chore (though a well lvoed one). I have No idea what you mean by halves? I didn't realize it had halves. I mean, check my other work, you can tell its done with love and from experience but totally uneducated in writing.

as a side note, the last two lines, some people love it for being a unique expression, some hate it and think its clumsy. me personally, thats the thought that came to my mind when I think of her talking or laughing in that fake manner she came to adopt over the years. of course that image was spawned by two hits of windowpane so maybe the people that love it also used too much acid...no idea

I have No idea what you mean by halves? I didn't realize it had halves. I mean, check my other work, you can tell its done with love and from experience but totally uneducated in writing.
Not a half as-such, just the midpoint in the poem. I took the first half as ending with the line "watch her smile, it looks so real", and the beginning of the second as "Then the facade begins to peel". The halves aren't defined, you didn't design it with halves, but with the transition between those two lines, it seemed as though there were different "parts" to it.

as a side note, the last two lines, some people love it for being a unique expression, some hate it and think its clumsy. me personally, thats the thought that came to my mind when I think of her talking or laughing in that fake manner she came to adopt over the years. of course that image was spawned by two hits of windowpane so maybe the people that love it also used too much acid...no idea
Well, it's good to have varying opinions on some things. It is a good expression, it's just that the pacing threw me off slightly. Seems to have more syllables than the rest. Still, if you're happy with those lines, keep it as it is.