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OneMulatto
2008-10-26, 17:11
tired of chasing money and fucking hate my work
but the green in the bank account is what legitimatizes my worth
hits of acids, valiums and percs
hope this numbs the violence and murders the hurt
.. but this gun and bullet will fucking silence the earth

Moonius
2008-10-26, 18:23
tired of chasing money and fucking hate my work
but the green in the bank account is what legitimatizes my worth
hits of acids, valiums and percs
hope this numbs the violence and murders the hurt
.. but this gun and bullet will fucking silence the earth

fight flight and saturation
here comes the retardation
all you know is freely fucked
please sit on my dirty duck


I love the last line, but I dislike the transition from 1st to 2nd. If you could rework those to make it flow a little more it'd knock. The third doesn't work too badly with the second.

I can just imagine that last line being screamed man, it's great.