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None Other
2008-10-27, 05:34
Waiting for the Doc

The smudgy glass screen door slides open as I approach it. Through it is a moderately sized white-washed and sterile room lined with chairs; doors branch off in all directions. The plastic chairs have people sitting in them. Some were slumping over, barely registering the intrusion, others briefly turn their eyes to me. Once the excitement had died down they turned back to their various magazines and newspapers.

Two old women sitting in a corner are talking very loudly and very audibly. They seemed to be reminiscing about the good old days and trading stories about their children and dead husbands. They are so excited about the company. Probably the most excitement they’ve had since the fucking Bay of Pigs!

I edge myself around the chairs and notice a thin, lanky old man glaring at me. He stinks faintly of dog shit which I notice is plastered on a shoe that is blocking my way; his spindly legs sprawl inelegantly in front of him. I stepped over the asshole like he doesn’t exist and make my way to the circular reception desk.

The receptionist is a middle aged woman staring intently at a computer screen. Being the polite guy I am I wait a full twenty seconds for her to notice me rather than interrupting her important work, obviously more important than receiving people. When it became apparent she is totally absorbed, I made a big decision.

“My name is William Reed and I have an appointment”.

I hear a rasping cough in the background. She looks up at me and smiles. She has yellow teeth and a fuzzy moustache.

“You have an appointment, do you dear, what’s your name?”

I stare at her before answering. “I’m William Reed”

She looks down at a roster, “Dr McCarthy?”

I nodded silently. She stunk of cheap perfume.

“Take a seat please”

I turn my back to her and survey my options. I sit two chairs down from the chattering old women, who had become so enthusiastic I swear they were almost wetting themselves. What the fuck is that smell? It’s like dust and vomit, and a poor attempt to mask it with industrial grade cleanser. To take my mind off it I take an anciently outdated National Geographic from the stand. Apparently there is some kind of talk, an invasion of Iraq. I sit down.

Now that I notice the smell I cannot get it out of my head. It’s like I’m suffocating. The door slides open and a gust of chilly air gives me a moment of relief.

A middle aged mother and her obscenely fat kid waddle in and sit opposite me. I cannot help but notice the woman has a gigantic ass. Her dirty blond hair has flecks of grey through it and her face is haggard. Her fat kid sits down next to her and crosses his arms, his lips pouting and his cheeks red. I can only assume he is here about his weight; the doc is going to tell him to put down the fucking fork. For a mother to allow her kid to get this fat is child abuse. She must feed him nothing but sugar and fried crap for him to be this big.

She pats him on his knee and he stands up and waddles to another chair, petulantly refusing her sympathy. The woman does not show the slightest flicker of expression, except maybe relief and she leans back into the hard plastic, fishing a magazine from her cheap purse.

It baffles me that someone would choose to have kids. Eighteen years at least down the drain; wind up hypnotised by TV and working a crappy job to send your kids to school, in the knowledge that a full life would demand the exact same behaviour from your offspring. Chew with your mouth closed, contribute to the economy and obey the law. Pop out fat spoilt kids to buy and work and keep the system going. Drink and watch sport and forget about your problems. What the fuck makes a guy like me superior to a women like her. I am rambling; stop it man!

I see the kid is staring at me. I look him straight in the eye. I can feel my face scowling. The fat prick looks back at his feet. I almost laugh. What a big man I am, intimidating a fucking 12 year old. I detect a flicker of movement in the corner of my eye.

“William Reed?” the doctor calls out in a husky, high pitched voice. I nod and stand up, he beckons me “come into my office”. I feel the eyes on my back.


I walk into his small office and take the grimy chair he point’s to, sitting on the other side of his surprisingly fine oak desk. I take an immediate dislike to this man. He has his grey hair slicked back over his balding scalp. He is slightly chubby and his face sags and is devoid of expression, except possibly suspicion.

“So Mr Reed… what can I do for you?” He stares at me blankly through half closed eyes and leans back in his leather chair, arms crossed in front of him.

I politely smile and put my hands in my lap, I have always been good at lying to strangers, but I had to at least attempt to hide my dislike for this man.

“So I have been having problems sleeping, and I was hoping you could do something about it for me”. He squints at me suspiciously

“You want me to prescribe you tranquilisers?” I was somewhat taken aback by the directness of this comment, it just can’t be that easy. Do I look that much like a god-damn junky? I knew I should have fucking shaved this morning!

He’s trying to test me. “I don’t know, if it will help, I have not had this problem before”.

He looks at his computer screen passively, “So how are your sleeping habits?” he says in a monotone voice.

“I lie down at about 10.00 but I just cannot get to sleep. I find it impossible to just switch off”, Ain’t that the truth, But I sense this prick is drifting off himself, his head bobbed and his eyes are on his hands.

He inspects his fingernails then he rouses himself, goes to type something down on his computer, probably checking my history. “Do you drink or smoke in the afternoon?”

I notice a photo of his family, “No, I don’t”.

His wife is as ugly as he is, and his kid inexplicably attractive, at least compared to his parents. Guess he got lucky.

The doc looks up, bored eyes regarding me as an annoying triviality.
“I’m going to check your pulse”

I pull up the sleeve of my black jacket and expose my thin, pale wrist. He probes for a pulse, his soft, slightly moist hands making my back tense up and my fist clench. Without a word he stops and writes something down. I roll my sleeve back down.

“Well…your pulse seems stable”, he drawls “If your problem is sleeping then I suppose I can prescribe you Temazepam” I wince… No valium? I guess I better take what I can get, for the first visit at least.

“If you think that is what I should use. What are the side effects?” An old trick. A junky is not going to give a fuck about the side effects.

He leans back in his chair and sniffs through his pug nose. “They are relatively harmless, as long as you don’t mix them with drugs or alcohol”, He turns to his computer. “That being said only take them as a last resort, or you could form a habit, and keep it one at a time” He hands me a script, I shake his clammy hand, feeling slightly dirty from the soft, moist grip.

I walk out and through the door. Only one of the old women is left, she is staring at her handbag. The mother was sitting alone. Her fat kid is gone. The old man is complaining to the receptionist. I walk out of this depressing scene into the chilly air. Why the fuck did I bother hustling such a piss poor excuse for a drug? It’s a good skill to have. I almost laugh again. I still feel slightly oily from the handshake.Paragraphing

Moonius
2008-10-29, 09:05
Fuck, I feel cheated. I thought I was going to learn something about getting drugs out of doctors.

:(

None Other
2008-10-29, 10:27
It's all in the shifty eye's.

Also make sure not to shave or bathe for a week before hand.

The idea is that they feel sympathetic...

Toothlessjoe
2008-10-29, 11:33
Not bad, not bad at all.

I think this would lend itself well to future works.

None Other
2008-10-29, 12:11
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Funny you say that; I have already written it.

What with my fragile ego I may wait for some more feedback before I post it though/

Malkog
2008-10-29, 22:50
Easy to read which is always good. I hate having to plough through 80 paragraphs of work that doesn't flow. But I didn't. I enjoyed reading it.

None Other
2008-11-03, 12:20
Lucid Haze

The catatonic serenity of a benzodiazepine drunkenness seeps from my heavy arms and legs to my weightless head. My walk is steady; the dose is not large but enough to make the world unreal. The sky is slightly overcast, the air cold in the morning haze. The cracked footpath and the people on it stretch out along the city road.

It’s not that I don’t see the shuffling people. The old woman’s downcast eyes and shuffling waddle, the aggressive stare of the young man in a tight fitting yellow fluoride shirt, his face contorted in an ugly sneer, possible phallic insecurities racing through his pea sized brain.

It’s not unlike the time you wake up from bed first thing in the morning. Not vacant of a mental recognition but rather a mental response. Like a TV screen or an iPod but chemical. It’s a catharsis which is no different than any other. A little kick. In the back of my mind I am secretly proud of my trance. It’s easier to buy an iPod; to suck my brain from out of my ears and drift in my narcissistic cocoon, upheld by my choice of audio stimulation… but I think it’s more fun my way.

A car honks its horn, the lady behind the wheel chatting on her mobile phone.

A woman chides her screaming child outside a coffee shop.

Three workmen chat and push as they take up the whole fucking sidewalk.

I weave my way through the sparse crowds to a bus stop. Green and etched with crude and vulgar ramblings of bored individuals. I take a seat on the cold steel bench, compulsively brushing the surface first. An empty beer can is sitting in the corner.

Across the road a young couple strolls hand in hand down the sidewalk. The woman is slightly too chubby and the man is slightly too thin, but they seem content. So does the smiling mother and her cooing infant in her small stroller, nodding hello to the couple as they pass each other.

A pretty looking woman with a fabulous ass walks past the stroller, arms crossed under her breasts and ears plugged up with the plastic earphones and her eyes covered with disgustingly large sunglasses. Her eyes are focused ahead of her, I think, and a cold expressionless look appears to be on her face, although I can’t be sure.
A tattooed man is leaning against a wall, passively puffing his cigarette. I don’t know what he is watching; his eyes are sheathed by ray ban sunglasses.

I blink, eyelids straining against me to stay closed. I Lean back against the back of the green cover. I look at the slightly grey sky in a total daze; wispy clouds swiftly cascade across the sky. I suck the air through my mouth, filling my lungs with the morning breeze, and promptly almost cough my guts out.

I hear the shuffle of footsteps and rub my eyes. I feel the pressure slightly shift on the seat and drunkenly lull my head to my left. A young woman is sitting there, not attractive but not ugly. She isn’t fat, but she couldn’t be called skinny. I smile, only half genuinely.

“Hello” I slur slightly and shake my head violently, trying to get it together.

She keeps her brown eyes on her handbag on her lap.

“Hi, how are you doing?” I say again.

She looks briefly at me, nervous by my slightly intense gaze into her eyes. I smile again and look ahead of me.

“Good”. She titters; I see the smoker has lit another up.

I smirk. “That’s good” He has his hair tied back in a ponytail. Her hair is cut into a blond bob.

A silence stretches for a while. What the hell, may as well kill some more time.

“You have much planned for the day?” I try and sound as sober as possible.

“No” She flashes another quick look at me. Proper social etiquette demands a certain bare minimum. “How about you”

“Ohh well, I’m just heading back from work” I look at the tattooed man across the street, puffing at his second cigarette. He looks like he is waiting for something.

“Really…” She is such a silly girl. If I have to put up with these one syllable grunts I may as well entertain myself.

“Yeah it’s such a fucking pain in the ass,” I’m slurring slightly again. “Unfortunately it’s an unfortunate necessity.” That didn’t sound right. “But how else does one maintain their decedent lifestyles?” I grin at her.

Somewhat taken aback from this torrent of conversation from a total stranger she decided etiquette be dammed. She starts to plug into her iPod. “I’m not sure”.

I check my watch. 5 minutes till the bus. I stand up, my head swimming, almost falling down again. I think the second wave is kicking in. Shit. I need to know at least a slight measure of restraint. I walk to the sushi bar, about ten steps away and pick out a coke from their drink fridge. I pay the man and stumble back.

The girl is trying very hard to avoid looking at me. I almost giggle. I take my seat and lean back, relaxing as waves of catatonic serenity push me towards sleep. Turning my muscles into water and making my mind quite. I see the man across the road, now talking to another equally tattooed man, both puffing away.

The bus roles up and I drag myself to my feet. I smile and gesture to the girl to go first. She steps up the small bus stairs. I give the old driver with gold rimmed aviators the $1.20 and take a seat near the middle of the bus, far away from the girl who is sitting at the back seat.

I lean my head against the glass and feel myself drifting away.

Damn it; don’t go to sleep man…

I wake up half an hour past my stop.

Ahh fucking shit! Not again.




(While this story is less refined, I think it is the better of the two. I really hate the title as well so if anyone has an alternative I would appreciate it. If anyone has any critisisms or for that matter...praise, I would love to hear it)