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Anarchist88
2008-12-01, 03:47
He strikes in instinct, he attacks without remorse.
He goes in empty, and comes out even worse.
He holds his tether to life like a writhing snake.
He is silent and unseen,
Only he knows the mess he will make.
His mind is a forest on Halloween.
Killing out of need, like following a ghost.
His mind is botched. He is chased along the coast
He trudges on his razor edge path to death.
A death he can be proud of, a death that will be heard.
Only when they are all gone will he take his last breath.
His shadow twists with the moon,
His life is dedicated to their doom.
The farther he gets, the quicker the pace.
He has one hand on his dagger,
And one over his face.

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Comments and criticism are encouraged.

Moonius
2008-12-01, 15:27
I liked it. A lot. Criticism? I am weak, sir!

I apologize for rolling lies
My mind is crude and qualifies
A prolonged stroke with bashful reigns
Charging wildly on the plains

Axe in hand I bellow out
Menacing and full of doubt
A forceful trigger doesn't slip
Trembling with my my lower lip

Anarchist88
2008-12-01, 20:29
fuck! i just realized i rhymed " ghost" with "ghost" :( ill have to change tht... lol

bornkiller
2008-12-02, 05:06
fuck! i just realized i rhymed " ghost" with "ghost" :( ill have to change tht... lol
I see you've rectified it?
Now I have nothing to criticize.
God damn it! I always get in here to late.:rolleyes:
I like...:cool:

Anarchist88
2008-12-03, 02:39
I see you've rectified it?
Now I have nothing to criticize.
God damn it! I always get in here to late.:rolleyes:
I like...:cool:

thanks dude. well, anyways, heres something off topic: is your account name a reference to the movie " Natural Born Killers" by any chance?

bornkiller
2008-12-03, 06:05
thanks dude. well, anyways, heres something off topic: is your account name a reference to the movie " Natural Born Killers" by any chance?
It was meant to be bonekiller but I got it wrong. :(








Nah....:rolleyes: kdg
I like hunting, Movie Reference inspired also, I guess? (pulpfiction) didn't sound to :cool: even though it was the better movie.

Anarchist88
2008-12-03, 22:41
It was meant to be bonekiller but I got it wrong. :(








Nah....:rolleyes: kdg
I like hunting, Movie Reference inspired also, I guess? (pulpfiction) didn't sound to :cool: even though it was the better movie.

i loled at the beginning :D