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Nohan
2008-12-26, 00:33
i will simply express myself.
a metaphorical being existing within a dream.
planted like a seed into the soul of where I sleep.
never dare to tread the waters when I see them.
never dare to climb the heights when I see them.
I dare not drown.
I dare not fall.
I dare not awnser the siren's call.

I dare not listen.
I dare not speak.
I dare not express I am weak.

I dare not follow.
I dare not lead.
This train of thought derails with me.

Moonius
2008-12-30, 04:13
http://chuckels2000.tripod.com/sitebuildercontent/sitebuilderpictures/1stgch116masterball.jpg

Permission denied?

Anarchist88
2009-01-01, 03:13
http://chuckels2000.tripod.com/sitebuildercontent/sitebuilderpictures/1stgch116masterball.jpg

Permission denied?

huh?

anyways, nice piece. i know it was meant to be repeditive, but it seemed a lil too repeditive. also, i didnt like how u used " see" in both the fourth and fifth lines. i liked the last stanza though, i can relate to it

Nohan
2009-01-03, 03:43
huh?

anyways, nice piece. i know it was meant to be repeditive, but it seemed a lil too repeditive. also, i didnt like how u used " see" in both the fourth and fifth lines. i liked the last stanza though, i can relate to it

nah it suckedd. i wrote it when i was sketchy from shit. all drugged out lol.

and moon-man wrote that cuz he's pissed i rejected his acquintanceship one day lol.

Moonius
2009-01-03, 06:42
nah it suckedd. i wrote it when i was sketchy from shit. all drugged out lol.

and moon-man wrote that cuz he's pissed i rejected his acquintanceship one day lol.

Did not catch.